Pitch: My friend ended up getting a staph infection while doing summer staff.
Sketch/Map
My story will be in video form with the audience in mind of anyone who has been to a camp or volunteered with those whom they don’t know. I would try to use language that would capture a young adult audience such as bits of humor and sentimental feelings separated by points of space and flashback. The form might be from the perspective of Justin, the protagonist, telling me his view of the situation while we road trip from camp in Minnesota back home to Colorado therefore creating a more personal feel. This would allow for me to give his perspective to set the scene than give my thoughts on the situation from an outsider’s perspective and bring in the moral/lesson.
tami8416 said:
I think you have a really good map/ sketch laid out here. I really like that Justin could be telling you his view of the situation while you road trip from camp back to Colorado. I really think that will give the readers a chance to realize that the story is not your own while also establishing some sort of credibility for yourself. Will you be using his voice in the video, yours, or a combination of the two? Any way you choose will be effective in my opinion. Also, will your points of space be silences in the narrative or physical spaces between your pictures and video clips?
You’ve got a great start so far!
-Taylor
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